Someday

This is so cute! I like that you added the lighting effects on the sprites based on where they were, and between the visuals, audio, and description, I got a really good feel for the place and tone of the settings. The main characters and their relationship were well-written, and I was really rooting for the two of them over the course of the story, which moved at a good pace.

Some minor gripes: I had some trouble reading Ricky’s name since the blue is so dark against the black text box, especially when there’s a sprite behind it. The abrupt music transitions took me out of the story (though the music selection is nice, as another commenter said). Also I downloaded the PC version by accident since I assumed it would be the first one. I wasn’t paying the most attention, and you don’t have to put the PC version first, I guess, but adding the icons for which system each download is for could help people who aren’t paying the most attention download the right one for their system.

I was thinking at the end of the story that Frank was getting stuck in his “someday”s too much when it came to Ricky. Like he was “supposed” to overcome his trepidation and declare his love in a dramatic moment on the rooftop. But I like it better this way. Only so much can change in a night, and he’s on his way. We get the sweet line from Ricky about being patient.

Good job on your first VN!

This was so sweet! I really love all the vibes and the heart touching moments from the flashback to the end of the game. The music choices felt solid too.

All I'd say is that some of the transitions of sprites appearing and scenes changing felt a little abrupt/jarring to me, especially in the early on sequences of the game but maybe that's just me.